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You ignored my thread on Lounge so I posted it here :blink:
<div class='spoiler_toggle'>Spoiler: click to toggle</div><div class="spoiler" style="display:none;">New story called "The Inner Power"
Just finished the first episode.... Tell me if its good and if its worth keeping on...
The story starts in 1935... Two tears after Hitler was selected to be the fuhrer, he spreads his Nazi ideolegy which is hatred against the Jews based on Darwinism.... He wants to conquer the world.. There was a small group of Jews who were "spared" and joined the Gestapo.... The story starts when 4 Jews, David, Daniel, Shlomo and Shimon defeat a bunch of Romanian people who Hitler considers low life forms too
Episode 1: "David vs Hitler and the Nazi Armi
Italy, March 7 1935
David and his crew defeated the Romani people
Daniel: "Those guys were tough but no match for us the Jews"
Shlomo: "Lord Hitler, the fuhrer would give us a good prize"
Shimon: "Why would the fuhrer even want to beat those guys"
Daniel: "There is a legend saying the Romani people have some weird power which can grant them any wish they want"
Shlomo: "That sounds good... "
David: "We have to get back to Berlin and inform the commanders we defeated those people
Daniel: "Whatever you say David... you are yhe captain"
And so they head back
Meanwhile in Hitler's plane
Gobless: "Lord Hitler, the execution of the Romani people in Italy was a success... According to my information, it was done by poor Jews from the 7th part of the Gestapo"
Eichmann: "Those rats get stronger and stronger as time passes.. Even the low poor Jews are capable of having great strength"
Hitler blasts the window with a ki blast...
Gobbles: "Lord Hitler, are you mad about something?"
Hitler: "Go get the president Binyaminov"
Jacov Bynyaminov is the Jewish ruler of Berlin who became a slave of Hitler once he took over Germany.... Though he pretends to be loyal to Hitler, he hates him for whats he done to the jews and hopes to beat him in the future... though he is afraid of his great power and cant do a thing against him.."
Eichmann: "Lord Hitler... Binyaminov is here"
Hitler: "Let him in"
Binyaminov: "I was told you wanted to see me, L-lord Hitler"
Hitler: "That's right... Tell me, did you put an order of not buying in Jews's stores?"
Binyaminov: "Yes sir... People seemed to refuse at first because Jews's stores have the best things to sell"
Hitler: "They will handle it... I can't allow Jews to have any control over my country"
Binyaminov: "Yes my fuhrer"
Hitler: "I see you brought your son... I wanted to see him... does he have great powet"
Binyaminov: "Yes... My son Asher is an excellent fighter who belongs to our royality family... His power surpasses even mine"
Hitler: "I would like to adopt him for a while"
Hitler: "Tell me, how old are you?"
Asher: "Not your business"
Binyaminov: "Asher! Be polite to the fuhrer"
Hitler: "Hohoho... You are pretty rude are not you? I like your attitude.."
Asher: "S-sorry m-my lord... I am 11"
Hitler: "That's good... You can go now..."
Binyaminov: "thank you Lord Hitler"
Gobbles: "Hehe.. ugly rats
Binyaminov: "Kukuku..."
And they leave
Asher: "Dad, why are we slves of this hidious dictator.."
Binyaminov: "Hitler is much stronger than we can imagine... there is no way we can defy him... But you will see my son that we Jrws are the chosen nation and we will get stronger and then we will all defeat him"
Meanwhile David gets to his home...
David: "Rachel, I am home"
Rachel: "David, I was worried"
David: "I am fine... what about Ishay and Adam?"
Rachel: "They are asleep... the fuhrer has given an order for all Jews kids of Germany to move to Russia"
David: "What??"
Rachel: "they will be sent to their deaths... Ishay is just 9 years old and Adam is a one year baby.. I am afraid"
David: "Dont worry... We will run them away of Germany"
Rachel: "May god help us"
Back on Hitlers plane
Gobbles: Lord Hitler, The Jews man of Binyaminov have started awar against us... They are heading to our place..."
Hitler: "Really"
Eichmann: "They are fools"
Binyaminov arrives with large henchmen...
Binyaminov: Be brave my Jews brothers... lets beat Hitler"
They defeat the Nazi soldiers on the plane and get to Hitler
Hitler: "so you finally decided to defy me huh Binyaminov?"
Binyaminov: "I will beat you and would rule Berlin again.."
Hitler: "How if your army is so scared of me"
Binyaminov: "Damn you"
Gobbles: "Lord Hitler, you dont have to deal with him... I will defeat him easily"
Hitler: "I will take care of him... I need to do some exercise"
Binyaminov: Dont think you would beat me that easily... I have a battle power of 70..."
Note: in this series a normal humans BP is 5...
Hitler: "Hohoho... should I say mine too? My battle power is 3,500.."
Binyaminov: "W-what??? Stop lying"
Hitler: "if you think I am lying come and try me"
Binyaminov: "Whoaaaa!!!!"
He punches him in the face but Hitler is not affected
Hitler: "I felt nothing"
Binyaminov: "Ughh.. Take that"
He blasted him with his powerful ki attack
Binyaminov: "I won?"
Hitler uneffected
Binyaminov: "no way!!"
Hitler punches him in the face and he goes down dead
Binyaminovs army: "sir Binyaminov!!!"
Hitler blasts them off
Gobbles: "Lord Hitler... What are going to do now?"
Hitler: "I will destroy the Jews of Berlin"
Back to David and Rachel
Ishay: "Father, where are you sending me and my brother"
David: "You will be safe going to Israel in the plane.. Rabbi Cohen will take care of you.."
Rachel: "Goodbye sons..."
And so, they fly away in a plane
Thew news arrived to David
David: "What, Lord Hitler killed Binyaminov??? He betrayed us???
Rachel: "What are we going to do now??"
David: "That bastard, I will defeat him...
Rachel: "He is a monster... He beat Binyaminov whose power is in par with yours... you will die"
David: "I am going.. If I am not back, know that I loved you Rachel"
Hitler: "Now time to destroy them.. There it is... The Menglashdbech place where the Germany Jews live.. Hehehe"
Gobbles: "Whats this?? Some Jew is heading towards us..
Hitler: "Huh?"
David: "Damn you Hitler!!!!!"
Eichmann: "The soldiers are sent to deal with him"
David defeats the soldiers with ease
Gobbles: "He beat s them all up... That rat"
Hitler: "Eichmann, open the planes door now..."
David: "Hitlerrrr!!!!!!!!! you coward, I will never forgive you"
Hitler is out facibg David
The soldiers are shocked and afraid of Hitler coming out
David: "We worked under you Hitlerr!! We Jews were your slaves... Why did you betray us? Why???!!!!!"
Gobbles: "Haha... Worked??"
Eichmann: "We used your Jew intelligence just to fit our own good"
David: "Huh? You bastards"
Hitler: "So I decided to destroy you Jews of Germany along the Menglashdbech place...."
Hitler charged his ki sphere
Bardock: "You bastard.. DIE!!!!!
David sends a blast but it gets absorbed by Hitlers ki sphere
David: "What the??!!!"
Hitler launches his blast
David: "Noooooo!!!!!!"
The Jews of Berlin are all killed while Hitler laughs along with his two right hands men Gobbles and Eichmann
Ishay gets to Israel along with Adam his brother on his hands...
End of episode 1</div>
<div class='spoiler_toggle'>Spoiler: click to toggle</div><div class="spoiler" style="display:none;">New story called "The Inner Power"
Just finished the first episode.... Tell me if its good and if its worth keeping on...
The story starts in 1935... Two tears after Hitler was selected to be the fuhrer, he spreads his Nazi ideolegy which is hatred against the Jews based on Darwinism.... He wants to conquer the world.. There was a small group of Jews who were "spared" and joined the Gestapo.... The story starts when 4 Jews, David, Daniel, Shlomo and Shimon defeat a bunch of Romanian people who Hitler considers low life forms too
Episode 1: "David vs Hitler and the Nazi Armi
Italy, March 7 1935
David and his crew defeated the Romani people
Daniel: "Those guys were tough but no match for us the Jews"
Shlomo: "Lord Hitler, the fuhrer would give us a good prize"
Shimon: "Why would the fuhrer even want to beat those guys"
Daniel: "There is a legend saying the Romani people have some weird power which can grant them any wish they want"
Shlomo: "That sounds good... "
David: "We have to get back to Berlin and inform the commanders we defeated those people
Daniel: "Whatever you say David... you are yhe captain"
And so they head back
Meanwhile in Hitler's plane
Gobless: "Lord Hitler, the execution of the Romani people in Italy was a success... According to my information, it was done by poor Jews from the 7th part of the Gestapo"
Eichmann: "Those rats get stronger and stronger as time passes.. Even the low poor Jews are capable of having great strength"
Hitler blasts the window with a ki blast...
Gobbles: "Lord Hitler, are you mad about something?"
Hitler: "Go get the president Binyaminov"
Jacov Bynyaminov is the Jewish ruler of Berlin who became a slave of Hitler once he took over Germany.... Though he pretends to be loyal to Hitler, he hates him for whats he done to the jews and hopes to beat him in the future... though he is afraid of his great power and cant do a thing against him.."
Eichmann: "Lord Hitler... Binyaminov is here"
Hitler: "Let him in"
Binyaminov: "I was told you wanted to see me, L-lord Hitler"
Hitler: "That's right... Tell me, did you put an order of not buying in Jews's stores?"
Binyaminov: "Yes sir... People seemed to refuse at first because Jews's stores have the best things to sell"
Hitler: "They will handle it... I can't allow Jews to have any control over my country"
Binyaminov: "Yes my fuhrer"
Hitler: "I see you brought your son... I wanted to see him... does he have great powet"
Binyaminov: "Yes... My son Asher is an excellent fighter who belongs to our royality family... His power surpasses even mine"
Hitler: "I would like to adopt him for a while"
Hitler: "Tell me, how old are you?"
Asher: "Not your business"
Binyaminov: "Asher! Be polite to the fuhrer"
Hitler: "Hohoho... You are pretty rude are not you? I like your attitude.."
Asher: "S-sorry m-my lord... I am 11"
Hitler: "That's good... You can go now..."
Binyaminov: "thank you Lord Hitler"
Gobbles: "Hehe.. ugly rats
Binyaminov: "Kukuku..."
And they leave
Asher: "Dad, why are we slves of this hidious dictator.."
Binyaminov: "Hitler is much stronger than we can imagine... there is no way we can defy him... But you will see my son that we Jrws are the chosen nation and we will get stronger and then we will all defeat him"
Meanwhile David gets to his home...
David: "Rachel, I am home"
Rachel: "David, I was worried"
David: "I am fine... what about Ishay and Adam?"
Rachel: "They are asleep... the fuhrer has given an order for all Jews kids of Germany to move to Russia"
David: "What??"
Rachel: "they will be sent to their deaths... Ishay is just 9 years old and Adam is a one year baby.. I am afraid"
David: "Dont worry... We will run them away of Germany"
Rachel: "May god help us"
Back on Hitlers plane
Gobbles: Lord Hitler, The Jews man of Binyaminov have started awar against us... They are heading to our place..."
Hitler: "Really"
Eichmann: "They are fools"
Binyaminov arrives with large henchmen...
Binyaminov: Be brave my Jews brothers... lets beat Hitler"
They defeat the Nazi soldiers on the plane and get to Hitler
Hitler: "so you finally decided to defy me huh Binyaminov?"
Binyaminov: "I will beat you and would rule Berlin again.."
Hitler: "How if your army is so scared of me"
Binyaminov: "Damn you"
Gobbles: "Lord Hitler, you dont have to deal with him... I will defeat him easily"
Hitler: "I will take care of him... I need to do some exercise"
Binyaminov: Dont think you would beat me that easily... I have a battle power of 70..."
Note: in this series a normal humans BP is 5...
Hitler: "Hohoho... should I say mine too? My battle power is 3,500.."
Binyaminov: "W-what??? Stop lying"
Hitler: "if you think I am lying come and try me"
Binyaminov: "Whoaaaa!!!!"
He punches him in the face but Hitler is not affected
Hitler: "I felt nothing"
Binyaminov: "Ughh.. Take that"
He blasted him with his powerful ki attack
Binyaminov: "I won?"
Hitler uneffected
Binyaminov: "no way!!"
Hitler punches him in the face and he goes down dead
Binyaminovs army: "sir Binyaminov!!!"
Hitler blasts them off
Gobbles: "Lord Hitler... What are going to do now?"
Hitler: "I will destroy the Jews of Berlin"
Back to David and Rachel
Ishay: "Father, where are you sending me and my brother"
David: "You will be safe going to Israel in the plane.. Rabbi Cohen will take care of you.."
Rachel: "Goodbye sons..."
And so, they fly away in a plane
Thew news arrived to David
David: "What, Lord Hitler killed Binyaminov??? He betrayed us???
Rachel: "What are we going to do now??"
David: "That bastard, I will defeat him...
Rachel: "He is a monster... He beat Binyaminov whose power is in par with yours... you will die"
David: "I am going.. If I am not back, know that I loved you Rachel"
Hitler: "Now time to destroy them.. There it is... The Menglashdbech place where the Germany Jews live.. Hehehe"
Gobbles: "Whats this?? Some Jew is heading towards us..
Hitler: "Huh?"
David: "Damn you Hitler!!!!!"
Eichmann: "The soldiers are sent to deal with him"
David defeats the soldiers with ease
Gobbles: "He beat s them all up... That rat"
Hitler: "Eichmann, open the planes door now..."
David: "Hitlerrrr!!!!!!!!! you coward, I will never forgive you"
Hitler is out facibg David
The soldiers are shocked and afraid of Hitler coming out
David: "We worked under you Hitlerr!! We Jews were your slaves... Why did you betray us? Why???!!!!!"
Gobbles: "Haha... Worked??"
Eichmann: "We used your Jew intelligence just to fit our own good"
David: "Huh? You bastards"
Hitler: "So I decided to destroy you Jews of Germany along the Menglashdbech place...."
Hitler charged his ki sphere
Bardock: "You bastard.. DIE!!!!!
David sends a blast but it gets absorbed by Hitlers ki sphere
David: "What the??!!!"
Hitler launches his blast
David: "Noooooo!!!!!!"
The Jews of Berlin are all killed while Hitler laughs along with his two right hands men Gobbles and Eichmann
Ishay gets to Israel along with Adam his brother on his hands...
End of episode 1</div>
